текст арииНа сцене толпятся придворные. Все в явном беспокойстве - обсуждается дуэль между Форталой и Зергом. В толпе видны Гришнов и прикрытый плащом Юрий.
Первый граф:
Что делать, господа? Безумие творится! Пред нами без стыда Бахвалится убийца!
Второй граф:
Кровь дяди ожила в Эзаровом сыночке, Он перерезать нас Готов поодиночке!
Хор графов:
Все заверенья принцевы не стоят ни гроша, От Юрия Безумного до Зерга только шаг! До Зерга только шаг! До Зерга только шаг! До Зерга один лишь только шаг!
Что делать, господа? Ужель терпеть безгласно Бессмысленно гадать О том, что слишком ясно. Ведь если принц сейчас Империю получит, То каждому из нас Грозит такая участь.
Когда мы соберемся для присяги во дворце, Боюсь, сумеет мало кто остаться жив и цел. Остаться жив и цел. Остаться жив и цел. Остаться, остаться жив и цел.
Гришнов:
Терпенье, господа, Для гнева нет причины - Возможно, сей скандал По сути… поединок?
Хор графов:
Дуэль не первый год Запрещена законом, Но нету у него Ни шанса быть казненным.
Закон Его Высочеству, конечно, не указ, Каким он станет в будущем, когда таков сейчас? Когда таков сейчас, когда таков сейчас? Когда таков - сейчас!
Ну что же, господа: Принц перешел границы, Он сам нам повод дал К закону обратиться. Высокое родство - Вот щит его, и только. Мы выходки его Терпели слишком долго!
На должном основании мы требуем суда. Для Зерга трон Империи потерян навсегда! Потерян навсегда! Потерян навсегда! Потерян, потерян навсегда!
It doesn't matter what soft words his lordship may proclaim We all remember Yuri and the Prince is just the same The Prince is just the same, the Prince is just the same The Prince is, the Prince is just the same
What say you, noble lords? Enough with all this prating Forget your empty words The truth's beyond debating For if the Prince at last Succeeds his father's throne Then each man of our caste Will meet his fate alone.
First Count: What shall we do, my lords, in this madness? A killer stands so shamelessly before us!
Second Count: His uncle's blood lives on in Ezar's son And he will cut us down, one by one!
Chorus of Counts: It doesn't matter what soft words his lordship may proclaim We all remember Yuri and the Prince is just the same The Prince is just the same, the Prince is just the same The Prince is, the Prince is just the same
What say you, noble lords? Enough with all this prating Forget your empty words The truth's beyond debating For if the Prince at last Succeeds his father's throne Then each man of our caste Will meet his fate alone.
For when we give our oaths to Serg and take him as our lord I fear that almost all of us will fall beneath his sword Will fall beneath his sword, will fall beneath his sword Will fall, will fall beneath his sword
Grishnov: Your patience, gentle Vor, Such anger in this hall! This scandal you deplore Perhaps was ... just a brawl?
Chorus of Counts: To duel is outlawed by The Emp'ror's resolution But Serg is born so high There'll be no execution
His Highness is above the law, to no-one will he bow. How can we have him as our lord if he is like this now? If he is like this now, if he is like this now, If he - is - like - this - now!
The Prince, my brother Vor Has gone too far today And we cannot ignore The price that he must pay Nor can his father's name Protect him from our wrath He has well earned our blame On his destructive path
The Council of the Counts demands that Serg must be cast down And charges that the Prince's head will never wear the crown Will never wear the crown, will never wear the crown Will never, will never wear the crown!
Things to consider (though what you have is fine too): class for caste? My vowel for caste is different, but both variants are apparently ok. "Was it a duel at all?" maybe. both are again good. "All duels are outlawed by"?? I'm a little iffy on "destructive path".
And for the last bit I have a question for jetta-e. In the second libretto is this all still in Vortala's house? Philomytha's version has the ring of official government censure rather than a couple of upset guys at a party. Is this appropriate? The last part of Despair might be throwing me off.
The Second Act of our rock opera (from The Counts and further) takes its place a few days after the party at the Vortala House and later. So Philomytha is right. Despair is Serg's soliloquy what he recite alone in his rooms. The presence of Counts is only symbolique
Ah, accent issues! I thought we'd be bound to stumble across some sooner or later. I pronounce caste and cast exactly the same. Class does avoid the confusion, but doesn't rhyme so well. I guess it will have to depend on the accent of the singers .
The thing with 'all duels are outlawed by' is that it's a bit less staccato. The sentence structure is a bit more awkward that way around, though. Mm.
The destructive path bit is where I'm still trying to find something better, because the English is getting pretty strained there. Rewriting time...
- Philomytha, who should probably sign up for an account here
A revised version of the final verse, with slightly less tortured English:
The Prince, my brother Vor Has gone too far today And we cannot ignore The price that he must pay Nor can his father's name Make us forget the facts The Prince has earned our blame By his barbaric acts
me: Nor will his father's name Protect him from us all (in this hall) We're tired of these games And vow that he will fall? (he's long deserved to/this fall? His actions still appall? And this has gone too far?)
Bob: His only thin defense Can be his high-born status But we have too long endured His escapades among us
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31.01.2012 в 21:58Chorus of Counts:
It doesn't matter what soft words his lordship may proclaim
We all remember Yuri and the Prince is just the same
The Prince is just the same, the Prince is just the same
The Prince is, the Prince is just the same
What say you, noble lords?
Enough with all this prating
Forget your empty words
The truth's beyond debating
For if the Prince at last
Succeeds his father's throne
Then each man of our caste
Will meet his fate alone.
I'll add more as I write it :-).
- Philomytha
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03.02.2012 в 01:06First Count:
What shall we do, my lords, in this madness?
A killer stands so shamelessly before us!
Second Count:
His uncle's blood lives on in Ezar's son
And he will cut us down, one by one!
Chorus of Counts:
It doesn't matter what soft words his lordship may proclaim
We all remember Yuri and the Prince is just the same
The Prince is just the same, the Prince is just the same
The Prince is, the Prince is just the same
What say you, noble lords?
Enough with all this prating
Forget your empty words
The truth's beyond debating
For if the Prince at last
Succeeds his father's throne
Then each man of our caste
Will meet his fate alone.
For when we give our oaths to Serg and take him as our lord
I fear that almost all of us will fall beneath his sword
Will fall beneath his sword, will fall beneath his sword
Will fall, will fall beneath his sword
Grishnov:
Your patience, gentle Vor,
Such anger in this hall!
This scandal you deplore
Perhaps was ... just a brawl?
Chorus of Counts:
To duel is outlawed by
The Emp'ror's resolution
But Serg is born so high
There'll be no execution
His Highness is above the law, to no-one will he bow.
How can we have him as our lord if he is like this now?
If he is like this now, if he is like this now,
If he - is - like - this - now!
The Prince, my brother Vor
Has gone too far today
And we cannot ignore
The price that he must pay
Nor can his father's name
Protect him from our wrath
He has well earned our blame
On his destructive path
The Council of the Counts demands that Serg must be cast down
And charges that the Prince's head will never wear the crown
Will never wear the crown, will never wear the crown
Will never, will never wear the crown!
- Philomytha
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03.02.2012 в 12:03Things to consider (though what you have is fine too): class for caste? My vowel for caste is different, but both variants are apparently ok.
"Was it a duel at all?" maybe. both are again good.
"All duels are outlawed by"??
I'm a little iffy on "destructive path".
And for the last bit I have a question for jetta-e. In the second libretto is this all still in Vortala's house? Philomytha's version has the ring of official government censure rather than a couple of upset guys at a party. Is this appropriate? The last part of Despair might be throwing me off.
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03.02.2012 в 12:36Despair is Serg's soliloquy what he recite alone in his rooms. The presence of Counts is only symbolique
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03.02.2012 в 14:12The thing with 'all duels are outlawed by' is that it's a bit less staccato. The sentence structure is a bit more awkward that way around, though. Mm.
The destructive path bit is where I'm still trying to find something better, because the English is getting pretty strained there. Rewriting time...
- Philomytha, who should probably sign up for an account here
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07.02.2012 в 13:52The Prince, my brother Vor
Has gone too far today
And we cannot ignore
The price that he must pay
Nor can his father's name
Make us forget the facts
The Prince has earned our blame
By his barbaric acts
- Philomytha
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26.02.2012 в 11:26me:
Nor will his father's name
Protect him from us all (in this hall)
We're tired of these games
And vow that he will fall? (he's long deserved to/this fall? His
actions still appall? And this has gone too far?)
Bob:
His only thin defense
Can be his high-born status
But we have too long endured
His escapades among us
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26.02.2012 в 14:34- Philomytha
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26.02.2012 в 16:31Nor can he hide his crimes
Behind his father's name (father's throne?)
We have too many times
Ignored his wicked games (what he has done?)
- Philomytha
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26.02.2012 в 22:18